The shearing shed
“Aaaaaaaaa what’s that”. I saw a big hand coming towards me. I tried to move away but the hand got me. It half dragged, half pulled me out to a stage. I knew I was in the shearing shed. Suddenly, I saw about a thousand beady eyes staring at me. I started to run away and the people started laughing.”What’s so funny?”, I thought. Next thing, I know this funny little machine starts making a very loud noise and the tall woman is making it come toward me. I started to panic but I couldn’t move because the woman put my head between my legs. I started to yell for my friends but they couldn’t hear me.The woman started shearing my bottom. Finally, I stopped squirming and I let her finish. Then she pushed me down the sheep shute. It was really dark, but then I saw one of my friends stuck down here too.” Maybe it isn’t so bad down here after all” I thought.
By Brianna
Hi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have put yourself as a sheep in the story.If I were that sheep I would be very scared. What was the scariest part as a sheep if you were one? I am looking forward to read more of your stories.
From,
KC
Hi Kc,
ReplyDeleteI don't actually know what the scariest part would be if I was a sheep.So Bye for now
Hi
ReplyDeleteI love this writing it is soo good, I might as well say this is 3p!
Hey did your teacher tell you what level you got for this writing!
Aziza (your next door)
Hi Aziza,
DeleteNo I don't really know what you mean by did your teacher tell you what level but Thanks anyway.Bye!
Hi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing.
I think this writing is a 3p.
You might as well use some personification.
Keep up the good work!
From Shrey
Hi Shrey,
DeleteWhat is a 3p !?
Hi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing.
I think this writing is a 3p.
You might as well use some personification.
Keep up the good work!
From Shrey
Hi Shrey,
DeleteWhy did you write the exact same thing as before !?
Hi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteI really like you writing. You must of spent a lot of time doing writing. Is writing your favourite subject in school.
Hi Taine,
DeleteActually SSR and Art are my fav subjects in school.
Hi Brianna
ReplyDeleteWow I love the writing about The shearing shed. That is very cool
From kalkidan
Hi Kalkidan,
DeleteThanks!!!
Hi Carleece,
ReplyDeleteYou sound like a really nice friend and i'm sure we would be friends if we met.I think the scariest thing would be them metal thing.(forgot what it is called).Bye!